Reaction to Cause Essay Comments

This Essay became more difficult for me than I think it should have been. That is what happens when I start writing and i let my mind run free with ideas. My sentences just start making no sense, which is where you saw paragraphs 4 and 5 get all boggled into a ball. I think my head was in the right place but with distractions around me, I would focus one second, and less lose all thought the next. I'm glad i picked that topic, and that I was able to sort of get my point across to you, and hopefully the rewrite is a little better to understand.